The Best Christmas Present!
I love participating in various challenges especially writing challenges with prompts. Author Dan Alatorre hosts this amazing Flash Fiction Challenge where he gives a scenario and a keyword (actually its not him, its the randomizer that picksΒ the scene and the keyword for you from his list) and you can write anything within a 1000 words Β based on the scene, the keyword must become a part of your caption.
The list this time were all based on Holiday Scenes. The random number I got was number 9 and keyword number 8. My scene: “A Christmas tree in a small apartment with one open present and no one around” and my keyword was “Present“.
If you are interested in participating, click on the link above to read the instructions and choose your scene and keyword.Β Here is the story I came up with. Hope you enjoy it!
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The Best Christmas Present!
βItβs a weekendβ¦ go back to sleep!β I told myself even though mind was hell bent on waking me up early on a Saturday morning. Well, as it turns out, my mind had no intentions of listening to me. So I woke up and dragged myself into the kitchen. I put on a fresh pot of coffee and waited for the smell of freshly ground coffee to fill the air. Oh, how I love the smell of coffee in the morning, thatβs probably the only thing that can wake me up completely. I poured myself a cup and then sat by the windowsill looking out.
It had started to snow last night, it always starts snowing around Christmas time in this city. Β I observed the snow covered roads, it looked as though a blanket of clouds had descended upon them. I always enjoyed the beauty of snow. I could sit by the windowsill of my apartment and stare out at the snow falling from the sky, one little flake at a time.
The snow brought memories of home. βHomeβ β I donβt know what that word means to me now. It has been almost 10 years since I have been there. I have never thought about anyone back home in all these years. And Iβm pretty sure that no one at home missed me either. Especially, if you are just one of the 8 children, and not so special or talented like the others, then who cares if you are around or not?
I was born as the 5th child of Mr. and Mrs. Simmons. By the time, I was 3, I had a younger brother and my care was my second eldest sisterβs responsibility, who was at the time 14 years old. Having just become a teen herself, she hardly had any time for me. When I think about my childhood, the only thing I can come up as a pleasant memory are of Christmas mornings when all of us gather around the tree to open our presents. That was my only pleasant memory of home. Everything else just feels too painful to even remember. Most of my siblings had some form of specialty or talents. My sisters and brothers were considered the best in everything they did, they were all smart, played the piano, made the sports team, aced their SATs, etc. But not me, I was the plain one, the girl next door. It was a painful feat growing up with smarter siblings, when every attention and every praise was only directed their way and no one noticed you.
Being the ignored one was becoming unbearable for me, which is why as soon I graduated from High School, I ran away from home and came to this city. At first, it was difficult, but then I had made it. I went to college and got myself a degree while working as a waitress at the restaurant downtown. Now I have a job as a Marketing Specialist in one of the leading online editorials and I also own this apartment. Small it may be, but it still is mine! I was proud of my achievements.
I looked around my apartment, it was spacious enough for me. I had modestly furnished it with only a TV, entertainment table, a couch and a couple of chairs for the kitchen counter. Yet the hall looked full leaving just enough space in the corner for a Christmas tree. I stared at the small Christmas tree that adorned the corner and at the single wrapped gift box that lay beneath the tree. Although, I knew what the gift was, having bought it for myself, I walked up to the tree and picked up my gift. Wishing myself a Merry Christmas, I unwrapped the gift.
All I saw was a flash of light, then everything started to disappear and I felt like I was floating. The apartment was now empty, the only thing that remained was the Christmas tree and the open present, there was no one around. There was nothing in the apartment, it felt so empty that the vision was making me nauseous. I felt an overwhelming feeling in my heart that was making me go numb, I felt empty and naked like the apartment.
I could not entirely comprehend the meaning of the vision or how it was making me feel. In an impulse, I picked up the phone and dialed my motherβs number. She answered on the second ring.
βMomβ¦.!β
βJane β¦is that you?β
βMom, I am coming home!β I said quickly and cut the phone.
I left the open present under the Christmas tree, packed my bags and headed for the airport. I had no idea of what to expect or how to face my family. I did not even know if they would be happy to have me back, but I continued on my journey.
Next morning, with trembling fingers I pressed the doorbell of my home. When the door opened I saw my mother for the first time in ten years. She hugged me fiercely crying all the while. As I walked into the house, my dad came forward and kissed me gently on my forehead.
βWhere have you been all these years?β He asked.
I tried to explain but was too overwhelmed to talk.
My mother then said βCome here, we have a surprise for you!β and led me to the family room. I saw a huge Christmas tree with many presents beneath it.
βIs everyone here? And why are the presents not opened?β I asked
βThere are only 10 presents under that tree and they are all for you! For each Christmas that we missed you. We knew that someday you did come back homeβ mom explained.
βWe are so happy you came back, Jane!β Dad said
Overwhelmed with guilt and grief, I barely managed to say βMom, Dad, your love is my best Christmas present ever! Merry Christmas!β
40 Comments
oneta hayes
What a sweet story, well written and filled with good things for the little girl who felt left out.
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you Neta! π
luckyjc007
Lovely story and well written , and a happy ending, which I always love! The line…I did not even know if they would be happy to have me back….reminds me of the prodigal son that returns and receives compassion, hugs and kisses from his father . In your story…the daughter is still their daughter, and she has returned and that is something to be celebrated! (she “was lost, and now found” in their eyes.) π
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you so much! I’m glad you enjoyed the story π
Family is after all family π
Wandering Soul
Love it. Nothing like a Christmas family reunion!
MindandLifeMatters
A Christmas reunion is a topic from which several stories are inspired, this just another one! Glad you enjoyed it! π
EDC Writing
The spirit of Christmas beautifully conjured up by you … your words, your story touch deep.
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you so much! Appreciate your kind words π
ranu802
It seems like a true story, even if it’s not it’s a well narrated story. Your style gives me the impression you are a very kind person. Have a very Merry Christmas surrounded by people you love. All the best to you. π
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you! It’s not a true a true story, it’s purely fiction for me. But I know there are people who would wish to be with their families for Christmas but can’t. The inspiration for this story came from them.
My Christmas and New Years are always spent with my family, it’s a tradition we follow that I hope to continue as long as possible.
Merry Christmas to you too! π
Dan Alatorre AUTHOR
I liked that a LOT! I thought for a moment you were writing about me! Holy cow.
MindandLifeMatters
Oh dear…that would’ve been interesting π
Nicodemas
Just wonderful!
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you! π
Dr Meg Sorick
Very sweet! I’m glad she got reunited with her family and that they’d missed her all those years!
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you Meg!
Vibrant
Ah I really enjoyed reading it!
But I was also hoping that they were all dead by the end. I mean all family members were in heaven with God. The flash had killed the girl somehow π lol
Thanks for sharing!
Love and light <3
Anand π
MindandLifeMatters
Hahaha, I didn’t want to kill them all, it’s Christmas after all! π
Vibrant
This existence is so limited–they would have enjoyed christmas with big boss π
Darshith Badiyani
By Big boss you mean Thalaiva π
Vibrant
LOL π
MindandLifeMatters
I believe he means the ‘Thalaiva’ of us all! π
Darshith Badiyani
Yeah #TheOne #Thalaiva π
Dawn Marie
delightfully spun together left dangling on the evergreen branches.
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you for a delightful comment π
Mick Canning
Very nice. I wasn’t expecting the ending.
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you π
Darshith Badiyani
Loved reading this π Don’t mind my reply to Anand π We kind of play that way π Enjoyed the happy ending π
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it!
And no worries about the reply to Anand! π
Darshith Badiyani
Thanks π
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Indira
Love is the best present one can get. Nice sweet end.
MindandLifeMatters
Indeed it is! Glad you liked it π
blackcherriess
this is a beautiful and heartwarming story! it definitely placed a huge smile on my face. thank you for sharing <3
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you so much! I am glad you enjoyed the story! π
Meritings
I loved it (with a tear in my eye) π’ Thank you.
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you so very much for such a touching comment for the story! π
Reeanna Lynn
So sweet and touching. Always enjoy reading your thoughtful posts <3
MindandLifeMatters
Thank you Reanna! Glad you enjoyed it π
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